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[TOME Episode 02]

Well, you'd make the Chinese proud

You know, quantity over quality.

So let me get down to the chase. I didn't bother reviewing the last one because I'd have just been wasting my keystrokes. And I shouldn't review this one because I'll just be wasting my keystrokes. But I'll still point out all my nitpicks, because I feel like wasting my keystrokes.

1:
The villains really are awful. They're so stereotypically black that it makes me cringe. You have the "Cynical thug hacker" who follows in the steps of Mickey the dick with the " I hate video games" spheal (but at least Hotdigitydemon has creativity). Then you have the crazy "Jibba-jabbering" black racoon- ironically named "coon", who is even worse.
1-2:
How I would fix this: In terms of the green blob villain, you should make him aloof and despondent- as if he's say, a stoned teenager with nothing better to do than make money off of trolling the internet. He could still maintain the "doesn't give a fuck" attitude that way too.

As for the Black racoon- christ just stop yourself every time you think it's a good idea for him to say "WHACHOO SAY" or "BROTHA YOUSE ACTIN A FOOL".

Also that female villian had really bad dialogue. "Now my little keylime...!" AUGH.

2:
Characters are lame and cheesy.
The list is too long to point out everything. I hate your self insert, and how you write his dialogue in a mary sue fashion- how he's always written to be cleverer in conversations and being generally liked be everyone despite being a rather obnoxious and unlikeable character. I hate everything about Nylocke. Every time the female character dutifully comforts the other characters I cringe. I don't have major beef with the others except that they're cutouts from other animes (EX: Underdog main character who omg is actually super power, Dark mysterious loner who omg has heart of gold and best of intention.)

2-2:
How I would fix this: Learn what a Mary Suethor does and stop doing it. Stop making Nylocke state those obnoxious titles- just because a handful of Japanese characters can do it without being awful doesn't mean you can. Stop playing into cliches- like the girl who loves to comfort and bake cookies and the weak boy trying to impress her.

3:
You continuously state obvious and unnecessary detail. A big pool of green slime with a big "Danger" written in red above it. The villains and rivals pausing mid fight to tell their fucking life story like every god-awful Japanese cartoon. Shit like this.
3-2:
How I would fix this: Try reading a book, taking writing classes and or observing cartoon writing that is massively appealing- not just those cheesy animes you like.

4:
Music is rather shabby.

4-2:
How I would fix this: uh, better music.

And last my biggest point- the fact you ignore everyone. What, do you think you can just get a million dollar budget to create a show then fucking ignore everything the producers tell you? Not happening bub.

I could go on but fuck man so many keystrokes.

[Catwoman goes trick or tr]

always watch everything you make

I think you're under rated.

GregoryShitcock responds:

thou art very kind. thanks!

[Anime fight!]

My god

I have witnessed perfection.

[Mike's Date]

ahahaha!

.... what....?

[LiIium 2]

better

than the original.

GregoryShitcock responds:

you're too kind :)

[Swingers Episode 1]

I liked it

I only have one major issue: the voice acting. You really, really need a better mic and some recording software. Do more than one take on the lines and run it through a sound program to smooth it out and remove grain. Maybe set the audio quality in flash higher as well.

Other then that, it was a nice flash. I enjoyed the colorful characters.

[By the Brook]

I've no problem with a still frame

but like some of the people said, sound would have made this much better. Adding a waterfall loop with some background nature ambiance would have made this wonderful.

[Shinobi Noir Chapter 3]

It's a shame really

Your use of 3-d rendering really belittled your decent character work.

Kel-chan responds:

I didnt use 3d? but what do you mean?

[C. Crashing a Wedding]

god

Why did you ruin this movie with Rina-Chan's voice?

[The Legend of David 5]

these kind of things always depress me...

... when someone with a significant amount of skill decides to waste their time with a fanfiction. I really wish you would have taken the time to use your abilities to develop a completely original idea rather than paste one onto nintendo's, but I digress.

On to the overall movie though, my major concern is the laughably terrible voice acting. I'm not even trying to be an asshole when I say "laughable", but if it's enough to actually make me grin it's best I don't sit here and sugar-coat it. At least get a few voice actors instead of voicing everything yourself.

You should invest a bit more into your writing and dialogue too.

I think you should try to pursue other projects. While something like this is constructive to your animation and drawing skills, it does little for your creativity. Your animation isn't bad. You're no professional, but no one here is. And to give credit where it's due, this is above and beyond a massive chunk of what's submitted here.